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Topic: Grammatical, punctuation help needed

Everyone on here knows me and my huge run on sentences. I need help with this for DeClutterize Canada.

I am slowly recovering from the Swine Flu. Say a prayer for yourself that you don't get it. I read online where people said it was the worst they had ever felt in their life. Being the cynic I am I thought.....whiners, not in the least!!

Anyway, back to the topic. I am moderating a lot of groups on DeClutterize Canada myself and the spammers really got on my last nerve. After spending 3 days in bed I have over 400 emails from the same spammer that I have to delete from all the groups. I have no choice but to change all Groups over to Membership Pending Approval until I get other people to help moderate. I came up with the following questionaire to auto-send to Pending Members. I don't trust my grammar and punctuation to start uploading it to the Groups. I will post it below.

Please respond with corrections or rewording. Any help will be greatly appreciated. I have a dilemna with telling them they have to respond within 2 days but it may take me time to get to them. I do need that included, is it okay as worded or does it need to be changed?

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Due to the recent influx of a large number of spammers I am given no choice but
to place all new memberships on Moderated Status.

Please complete the following questionaire by telling us a little bit about yourself. If there is no response within 2 days the membership will automatically be denied. Blank responses will also be denied.

We do NOT sell, rent or share this questionaire with anyone else, and it is NOT posted to the group.

1. What is your Email Address?

2. What is your Yahoo ID?

3. Where do you live, Village/Town/City?

4. What is your Postal Code?

5. How did you find out about our Group?

6. Are you a member of Grouply?

Thank you for your response. As I am currently Moderating over 300 Groups personally please be patient pending your Membership approval.

Sharon
Owner DeClutterize Canada

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Thank Charlotte. I thought it was but when I typed it I didn't think it looked right. Blame it on the flu lol. Emily eom

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Posted by: pickles
Date posted: Thu Nov 5 15:09:44 2009
Message:

I've been sick too...UGH! I probably have the swine flu because it's the sickest I've ever been.

I think your writing looks fine however...since this is the net, people have a short attention span.  You want them to get the gist in the shortest time possible. This is important stuff, or their membership won't get approved.  So if it's too wordy, they may miss the "2 days" part. So here is what I suggest:

Due to the recent influx of spammers, all new memberships will be placed on Moderated Status.

Please complete the following questionaire completely (no blank spaces) within 2 days.  Otherwise membership will automatically be denied.

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Thank you pickles. Can I leave in the part about it taking me time to get through them without looking like I am contradicting the 2 day limit? Their response is of course dated as it is an email but if I get a lot all at once and I am working I won't be able to get to them all right away (run on sentence lol) Emily eom

I think that is perfectly fine Emily! Membership approval and membership applications are two different things, so I don't think it's a contradiction. Good luck! (pickles)

Thanks so much. Emily eom

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